#WritersCoffeeClub 24. Share something you’re proud of but had to cut from a work.

#WritersCoffeeClub 24. Share something you’re proud of but had to cut from a work.

i have a section of one chapter that is vulnerable to getting cut, even though i like it, and it has some thematic significance. it's a little over a page.

in this chapter, Lucifer and Eleanor are on a midnight stakeout, watching a flock of sheep for signs of demon activity. they're sitting in an ancient oak tree, with Eleanor inside the tree cavity, and Lucifer perched on a thick limb above her. so far, the mission has been a dud, and they are passing the time with storytelling. after a few rounds, Lucifer decides to recite some ancient poetry.

'When Luce would speak at length like this, the idiosyncrasies of her voice were given greater space in which to reveal themselves, and in the occasional rounding of a /th/ or rolling of an /r/ there lay a trace of something unaccountably ancient and mysterious, as though within her very breath a wind still blew from a world of dunes, red cliffs, and a sun that shone without mercy.'